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Once the Day has gone to rest,
The Night comes out at her behest.
Diamonds fill the sable sky,
Telling her story in empyreal high.

Behold she, the Matron of Night,
The stars and moon her birthright.
They adorn her as ethereal gown,
Atop which rests her ebon crown.

Dark mistress, Maiden of the Moon,
Brings her parody of high noon.
Silver orb, full and round,
Illuminates the sleeping ground.

Lady of Dreams, Nyx Hypnos;
She sates those who feel morose.
Helping them with all she knows,
Guiding them to sweet repose.

Caring for her subjects in a dream.
Flying along a faint moonbeam,
Noting all that she can glean.
She walks among the void unseen,

On eastern sky breaks the dawn,
Lady Luna takes to flight.
The day may be Celestia's,
But hers will always be the night.

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Fox-Ink Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Glad to find another writer. Rare a creature as we are.
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Thunessey Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Interface Designer
Thanks for the kudos.
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seikyuu Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
I'm honestly just so delighted to see a poem dedicated to our princess of the night. It is descriptive and well rounded, covering her, her duties, her role, and her effect on her subjects.  My only problems with it are that there are a few grammatical issues that could have been fixed without disrupting the flow of the poem. For example: "They adorn her as ethereal gown" You could have made it "as an ethereal gown" and it would have been more proper without sounding awkward. Also, speaking of awkward, the ending stanza kind of left an odd addition to my overall impression. I realize poems don't have to rhyme and that everyone has their own style, but as the reader who had spent most of this writing in a nice easy flow with steady rhymes I felt I should point it out.

Still, I'd recommend this post to any other child of the night who feels like taking a moment to reflect on our dear princess.
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Thunessey Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Student Interface Designer
Critique accepted. I had a time with making it flow, and I have been told my writing style is archaic.
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